(라이팅)Social media does more harm than good for teenagers.

호주 7학년 수준의 라이팅이며, 한국에서 국제학교 학생 또는 호주에서 셀렉티브, 나플란 시험을 준비하는 아이들이 읽어보면 좋을듯 합니다. 

Topic: "Social media does more harm than good for teenagers." Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write a persuasive text presenting your point of view, supported by reasons and evidence.

Social media is widely known for attracting thousands of teenagers and pulling them into addiction. Reports of cyberbullying, unrealistic beauty standards, and countless negative effects on teens’ mental and physical health continue to taint its reputation. As a result, many people call for stricter regulations or even an outright ban. But have we truly considered the positive side? While there are many reasons to be cautious, banning social media entirely would have serious consequences for communication, education, and social development.

First, what exactly is social media? It is a platform where users can share videos, images, and messages, often leading to hours of scrolling. However, it is also an essential tool for communication. In today’s fast-paced world, millions of people rely on social media to stay connected. Whether it’s friends keeping in touch, long-distance couples maintaining their relationships, or families separated by thousands of miles, social media allows people to maintain bonds that might otherwise fade over time. Without these platforms, many individuals would struggle to stay in contact, especially in cases where time zones and physical distance make regular phone calls difficult.

Beyond personal connections, social media also plays a crucial role in professional networking. Platforms like LinkedIn help individuals build careers, while businesses use social media to connect with customers. Many small businesses rely on social media for marketing, and banning it would strip them of a powerful tool for growth. Even job seekers benefit, as social media allows them to showcase their skills and connect with potential employers in ways that traditional job applications do not.

Additionally, social media provides access to educational content. Many students use platforms like YouTube to learn new skills, from coding to learning a new language. Educational influencers share valuable insights, helping people gain knowledge outside of the classroom. Even teachers and professors use social media to engage with students, creating a more interactive and accessible learning environment. Removing social media would take away these opportunities, making information less accessible for millions of people.

Despite its benefits, social media is often blamed for addiction, particularly among teenagers. Many parents and educators argue that platforms are designed to be addictive, encouraging endless scrolling and creating dependency. While it is true that social media companies use algorithms to keep users engaged, does that mean social media itself is responsible for addiction?

Ultimately, personal responsibility plays a significant role. It is the user who chooses how much time they spend on these platforms. Some people use social media to chat with friends, share their interests, or stay informed, without falling into the trap of mindless scrolling. Others however, spend excessive amounts of time-consuming content. The difference lies in self-control and personal choices. Instead of blaming social media, society should focus on teaching responsible usage. Schools and parents can educate young people on how to manage screen time and use social media productively rather than letting it control them.

Social media, like any tool, can be used for both good and bad. While it has its downsides, including addiction and cyberbullying, its benefits cannot be ignored. It allows people to stay connected, provides a platform for education and activism, and even helps businesses grow. Rather than banning social media outright, society should focus on promoting responsible usage and digital literacy.

주어진 주제에 대해 명확한 입장을 제시, 일관된 논지, 서론에서 문제를 제시후 본론에서 다양한 근거를 통해 글의 구조가 논리적이며 자연스럽게 전개되고 있습니다. 구체적인 사례(LinkedIn, YouTube 등)를 들어 설명한 점이 강점이나 반대 의견(중독 문제)에 대한 반박이 다소 짧아, 연구 결과나 통계 자료를 인용하면 더 강한 설득력을 가질 수 있을듯하네요.